Sunday, May 13, 2012

Mag117 Maybe

                                                                                       Paul Gauguin 

   "She is going to feed us- she is, she is-" My brother whispered
under his breath.. Mai, on the other side, remained silent and as watchful as I.
   We had been deep in the Jungle until early today, no food and unsure of
whatever water we found. The three hunters had brought us in here. Now
cleaned up. We sat where we had been put and waited, watching the large,
brightly clad woman bustling about the kitchen. Her back was to us,
 and in another second my hand- with a life of its own- was raising up
 like a snake. About to strike and pull back with that little piece of fruit
laying cut and ready- right there between the bowls.



15 comments:

Laurie Kolp said...

Intriguing ending!

Laurel's Quill said...

I love it when your body parts have minds of their own!!! good read!

Brian Miller said...

oy i bet they were starved...nice tension there at the end...and i be the food will be a great relief...glad they got found as well..

Karen S. said...

Oh no, not like a snake! Nicely done!

Trellissimo said...

We sat where we had been put

Yep, you captured the hesitancy and unease in the three figures, who certainly seem uncomfortable in this painting...

Gail said...

Well done.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Oh! I can see her hand, rising from under the table. Nice job!

Lyn said...

Charming...who could resist that morsel..more to follow, I hope...

Tumblewords: said...

Wonderful. It speaks so surely to the truth we see in this painting!

Helen said...

Your words caused me to re-examine Gauguin's painting....I could 'see' everything you wrote.

Kat Mortensen said...

That would be me! I'd be striking for the fruit, if I'd been in the jungle. Mind you, if you knew me, you'd realize just how outrageous that notion really is.

Nice little piece.

Tess Kincaid said...

That first line really drew me in...nice write!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

You have captured this perfectly. The reader is drawn right in and wants to know what happens after the hand reaches up........so good!

Sue said...

Thanks for giving me a different look at this.

Nicely done!

=)

Lydia said...

This is amazing, izzy. As I read it I was reading it as if it were in poetry form. I think, therefore, it is a prose poem...which I admire because I am not sure how to create one! :)