A river singing
over rock,
white bubbles flashing
popping into mirth,
under tones flinging fish aside.
Rough ride
deep tea brown
coursing from upstream,
leftovers from heat
of summer under trees.
Smoothing out into
plates of current
with roaming edges,
until ice forms
and tumbling debris
creates a fork
splitting, shifting boundaries
raking, taking more
with many claws
21 comments:
nice river song you sing here...transformation from summer to winter..a piece of nature..lovely
I like the "deep tea brown." I remember standing near a creek once thinking that exactly. Picturing the teabag upstream. :)
"taking more with many claws"
Oh, that speaks profoundly of the nature of flow, a current contained vs. wild and misdirected waters. Lovely.
Wonderful descriptions of nature. Flows together nicely to coincide with the fluid, transformative subject matter.
I loved "deep tea brown" - what a great description! Anyone who's seen water like that knows exactly what you mean.
Nice One Shot, izzy!
Nicely written.
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What great images, especially the "deep tea brown" and the claws of winter.
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Rough ride
deep tea brown
coursing from upstream,
I can see the colour and movement exactly.
Izzy...
This was wonderful!
nice..i really enjoyed listening to the river...as it is a fav thing to do IRL...i was intrigued by the claws at teh end as it seems a much harder word and begs deeper meaning...
Going from singing river to one with claws, summer to winter, transforming as I read, flowing on. Very nice.
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beautiful imagery here,
love the way you nail it.
very visual.. enjoyed it.
Fantastic piece of work...
"A river singing over rock"... :)
Indelible, delicately- and masterfully-wrought images. Excellent work.
That's quite a picture your words paint...enjoyed reading you.
I have loved rivers and wrote a river song too.. and I enjoyed your words here.. so simple and beautiful, bringing the river alive in my thoughts.. I liked it very much.. Thanks for sharing...
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