Wednesday, December 1, 2010

Drop down and go,

A river singing
over rock,

white bubbles flashing
popping into mirth,
under tones flinging fish aside.

Rough ride
deep tea brown
coursing from upstream,

leftovers from heat
of summer under trees.

Smoothing out into
plates of current
with roaming edges,

until ice forms
and tumbling debris
creates a fork

splitting, shifting boundaries
raking, taking more
with many claws

21 comments:

Claudia said...

nice river song you sing here...transformation from summer to winter..a piece of nature..lovely

L.L. Barkat said...

I like the "deep tea brown." I remember standing near a creek once thinking that exactly. Picturing the teabag upstream. :)

Phoenix-Karenee said...

"taking more with many claws"
Oh, that speaks profoundly of the nature of flow, a current contained vs. wild and misdirected waters. Lovely.

dustus said...

Wonderful descriptions of nature. Flows together nicely to coincide with the fluid, transformative subject matter.

Eric Alder said...

I loved "deep tea brown" - what a great description! Anyone who's seen water like that knows exactly what you mean.

Nice One Shot, izzy!

lordemmanuel said...

Nicely written.

Cheers!

PattiKen said...

What great images, especially the "deep tea brown" and the claws of winter.

Thanks for stopping by my place and commenting. I appreciate it.

izzy said...

Sorry, to the folks who require email, I don't want to give mine out. I do go read things on your pages though; and really appreciate people who come visit me, Thanks!

Jinksy said...

Rough ride
deep tea brown
coursing from upstream,

I can see the colour and movement exactly.

G-Man said...

Izzy...
This was wonderful!

Brian Miller said...

nice..i really enjoyed listening to the river...as it is a fav thing to do IRL...i was intrigued by the claws at teh end as it seems a much harder word and begs deeper meaning...

dan roberson said...

Going from singing river to one with claws, summer to winter, transforming as I read, flowing on. Very nice.

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Jingle said...

beautiful imagery here,
love the way you nail it.

Alakaline said...

very visual.. enjoyed it.

Sumit Sarkar said...

Fantastic piece of work...

"A river singing over rock"... :)

Steve Isaak said...

Indelible, delicately- and masterfully-wrought images. Excellent work.

Dasuntoucha said...

That's quite a picture your words paint...enjoyed reading you.

Shashi said...

I have loved rivers and wrote a river song too.. and I enjoyed your words here.. so simple and beautiful, bringing the river alive in my thoughts.. I liked it very much.. Thanks for sharing...

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Harshika said...

nice write :)

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