Monday, May 23, 2011

Magpie Tale, 5/23/11






She felt quite faint all of a sudden,
all happiness draining away.
She was going to have to excuse herself,
get some fresh air before serving.
A sip of water even-

20 comments:

honeyhaiku said...

This is a wonderful portrait of a moment in time.

Steve Isaak said...

Solid scene-start; a 'why' of her distress would improve it, make it feel complete.

Martin H. said...

She does look a little pale.

Lena said...

I know that dizzy feeling. But, yes, she does look white lol

Bee's Blog said...

Overcome by the lack of soap and water? I like it.

Stafford Ray said...

If I was sitting there I would be inclined to take the waiter's pulse to see if he was still breathing! And I would not eat the chook!

Donna B said...

I want more...what happened??

Friko said...

she's probably thinking of what will follow . . . .

120 Socks said...

Yes, she looks like a woman with something important on her mind!

Rinkly Rimes said...

I was also struck by her stricken look!

G-Man said...

And YOU....
You are another disappearing act!
Did you change your name to Houdini?
Some folks miss you as well.....G

Helen said...

I hadn't noticed .. she does appear to be pushing back from that table. Nice Magpie...

Grammy said...

That is an amazing take. I really enjoyed this version of what the image spoke to you.

Margaret Pangert said...

Wow, how observant you are! The server does look as though she's about to faint! Her face ashen pale, her body swaying forward as if she might fall at any moment. Great take using her POV as the protagonist. Excellent!

Sue J said...

Her expression says so much. Nice Mag.

Lyn said...

I can feel her chill..her need to leave that table..so well observed!

Margaret said...

...all happiness draining away. Really makes me want to read more!

Tumblewords: said...

Terrific insight! Well done...

Brian Miller said...

ooo mysterious...i like....

gautami tripathy said...

Loved it!

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