She felt quite faint all of a sudden,
all happiness draining away.
She was going to have to excuse herself,
get some fresh air before serving.
A sip of water even-
Wow, how observant you are! The server does look as though she's about to faint! Her face ashen pale, her body swaying forward as if she might fall at any moment. Great take using her POV as the protagonist. Excellent!
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This is a wonderful portrait of a moment in time.
Solid scene-start; a 'why' of her distress would improve it, make it feel complete.
She does look a little pale.
I know that dizzy feeling. But, yes, she does look white lol
Overcome by the lack of soap and water? I like it.
If I was sitting there I would be inclined to take the waiter's pulse to see if he was still breathing! And I would not eat the chook!
I want more...what happened??
she's probably thinking of what will follow . . . .
Yes, she looks like a woman with something important on her mind!
I was also struck by her stricken look!
And YOU....
You are another disappearing act!
Did you change your name to Houdini?
Some folks miss you as well.....G
I hadn't noticed .. she does appear to be pushing back from that table. Nice Magpie...
That is an amazing take. I really enjoyed this version of what the image spoke to you.
Wow, how observant you are! The server does look as though she's about to faint! Her face ashen pale, her body swaying forward as if she might fall at any moment. Great take using her POV as the protagonist. Excellent!
Her expression says so much. Nice Mag.
I can feel her chill..her need to leave that table..so well observed!
...all happiness draining away. Really makes me want to read more!
Terrific insight! Well done...
ooo mysterious...i like....
Loved it!
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