Monday, June 13, 2011

Magpie, 6/13/11











They looked around,
no child.
Where had Chyrstal gone ?
Then on the  floor by the back door
Mary found the little shell.
" Beach!" She yelled to her husband
and they were off;
over the gritty wooden deck,
leaping onto soft and shifting sand.
Stumbling up to the firmer pack
Mom shaded her eyes- "There John-"
Sure enough the youngster was crouched
intently plucking at something in the damp
as the waves rolled in.






29 comments:

Tulika Verma said...

Oh! You are such a wonderful storyteller!

tarunima said...

beautifully weaved!

Mama Zen said...

Well done!

mindlovemisery said...

So short but so action-packed and intense!

Old Ollie said...

authentic poem...I could see it and I could believe it

Rinkly Rimes said...

A great deal of drama in a very short story.

Kristen Haskell said...

I love the discovery in this piece.

Tess Kincaid said...

Wonderful tale. When at the beach, I have this same strong urge to dig for shells.

Laurie Kolp said...

lol- Hard to keep little ones away from finding shells at the beach...

Leslie said...

so glad they found her! this was a dramatic little tale...

Kathe W. said...

great story- very vivid- I could see your words.

jabblog said...

I could feel the panic of the parents - and then the relief.

Jinksy said...

Mini, as opposed to micro fiction! :)

Friko said...

This is a very enjoyable poem, I liked all of it except the name of the child.

Jingle said...

a dreamy image,
inviting word flow.
love to be where you lead us, cheers.

gsb3 said...

Enjoyed this tiny story in a poem. Captured me and held me in it.

Tumblewords: said...

A hunter and gatherer child. Delightful!

Kay L. Davies said...

Every parent's nightmare, and a very precious child.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

(Queenmothermamaw) Peggy said...

Love the visualization of your words. How we all love, even us oldsters, to dig in the cool damp sand. Great job.
QMM

Other Mary said...

Been there, done that. You describe it so well!

cosmos cami said...

A sweet little Mag Tale

Helen said...

I wasn't certain how your Magpie would end .... happily ever after is good.

Steve Isaak said...

Good piece.

Emily Young said...

you capture the magic of childhood and the sea

Lucy Westenra said...

A lovely story in poem form. Thank you.

Lydia said...

Now there's a scene I won't soon forget for its combination of parental worry/fear and child wonder/no fear. :)

Margaret said...

... loved how the anxiety for the safety of the child was strung out until the very end!

A Kwee Life said...

Izzy, I got an award :-) I picked you as one to pass it on to. I hope you like it and that it makes you smile. It’s in this post: http://akweelife.blogspot.com/2011/06/irresistably-sweet.html

chiccoreal said...

Dear Izzy: A story conveyed in so few words describes a very salient talent.