Bundles of brown air
turn like heavy fur
along iron curves
rising over cement
cyclops engine hums
nose bulging above rails.
A small caretaker
wool figure in jungle green
fitted jacket and hat is turned
to study her charge
When the bell and cry
for boarding comes
she curtsy's
gathering up her case.
Reading more prompts in the craft poetry book: suggesting we
" Think cinematically". This maybe a rework from a few years ago- it is a scene
that felt like it needs/ed, reworking.
turn like heavy fur
along iron curves
rising over cement
cyclops engine hums
nose bulging above rails.
A small caretaker
wool figure in jungle green
fitted jacket and hat is turned
to study her charge
When the bell and cry
for boarding comes
she curtsy's
gathering up her case.
Reading more prompts in the craft poetry book: suggesting we
" Think cinematically". This maybe a rework from a few years ago- it is a scene
that felt like it needs/ed, reworking.
7 comments:
ha. cool visuals...i am intrigued too....more story!
IzzyBella!!!!
You reworked this?
It sure seems Perfectly Izzy to me! You have such a passionate writing style, I'm always honored to have you contribute.
Thank You so much for sharing this with us. Thank you for supporting the Friday Fun, Have a Kick Ass Week-End
I love the fur! This reminds me of something from a child's storybook of the Victorian era. Very neat, Izzy.
Leaving Pennsylvania Station:
Dinner in the dinah
Nothing could be finah
than to have your ham-n-eggs
in Carolina
From song
"Chatanooga Choo-Choo"
Nice Izzy, is this an exerpt?
I'm not sure where you started from, but it doesn't need reworking now. It's very cinematic.
Your reworking paid off. It is amazing.
Be at peace this Christmas season. God bless you.
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