Friday, February 21, 2014

FF55 2/21/14 At the Station

 Bundles of brown air
 turn like heavy fur
 along iron curves
 rising over cement
cyclops engine hums
nose bulging above rails.
A small caretaker
wool figure in jungle green
fitted jacket and hat is turned
to study her charge
When the bell and cry
 for boarding comes
she curtsy's
gathering up her case.

                       Reading more prompts in the craft poetry book: suggesting we
 " Think cinematically". This maybe a rework from a few years ago- it is a scene
 that felt like it needs/ed, reworking.



Brian Miller said...

ha. cool visuals...i am intrigued too....more story!

G-Man said...

You reworked this?
It sure seems Perfectly Izzy to me! You have such a passionate writing style, I'm always honored to have you contribute.
Thank You so much for sharing this with us. Thank you for supporting the Friday Fun, Have a Kick Ass Week-End

hedgewitch said...

I love the fur! This reminds me of something from a child's storybook of the Victorian era. Very neat, Izzy.

Steve E said...

Leaving Pennsylvania Station:

Dinner in the dinah
Nothing could be finah
than to have your ham-n-eggs
in Carolina

From song
"Chatanooga Choo-Choo"

Nice Izzy, is this an exerpt?

Alice Audrey said...

I'm not sure where you started from, but it doesn't need reworking now. It's very cinematic.

Lady Lilith said...

Your reworking paid off. It is amazing.

Dr. kold_kadavr_flatliner, MD, the sub/dude said...

Be at peace this Christmas season. God bless you.