Tuesday, September 21, 2010

poetry bus /wedding

Breath and breath
swell, subside.

minds to heart
slow spiral stair

widen,lengthen
rise and deepen


one and one
blends to we.

5 comments:

Argent said...

Compact and thoughtful. Especially like the last stanza.

Helen said...

I also love the visual of blending to 'we.'

Peter Goulding said...

I think you should develop this into something more substantial. It stands alone but only just. Interesting take.

steveroni said...

Izzy, I like "short" and actually, it is fun to "fill in" the blanks--maybe just me. NO!

I also liked your "one and one makes one..." Unlike our program, where 1+1=3 Right?--grin!

You are certainly a faithful follower. Thank you.
Was this a "One Shot"???

Totalfeckineejit said...

Compact, simple, less is more sometimes.Dreamy.Likes it!