you put us right there...and in few words...the closing line are heavy...the watchers cconcern being elsewhere...
i agree with brian - i was right there - and felt sad while reading the last line...beautiful one shot!
Does the tractor hum because it doesn't know the words to the tune? (LOL!)Nice One Shot, Izzy!
So much is so few lines - did they speak? Was one leaving? Why was one concerned about rabbits and cages, while the other seemed frustrated with woodsplitting? So much. And done well, too.
Beautifully painted the moment in few words... I liked it. thanksॐ नमः शिवाय Om Namah Shivaya Twitter: @VerseEveryDay Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
less is more...but i want more...you left me with questions...not a critcism..no this is indeed praise...well done..cheers pete
Much to ponder here.
Spare & potent.
I love this wonderful pastoral scene. I agree with the others. There is so much more that I want to know. Excellent poem.Teresa
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