Wednesday, November 3, 2010

The Tractor Hums Too

In the curve of an eye
there go I
wandering down the gravel drive
Yet I am still
stuck at this mill
of wood splitting;

you watch from the door
of the barn
 wondering more
about rabbits and cages
than I.

9 comments:

Brian Miller said...

you put us right there...and in few words...the closing line are heavy...the watchers cconcern being elsewhere...

Claudia said...

i agree with brian - i was right there - and felt sad while reading the last line...beautiful one shot!

Eric Alder said...

Does the tractor hum because it doesn't know the words to the tune? (LOL!)

Nice One Shot, Izzy!

Glynn said...

So much is so few lines - did they speak? Was one leaving? Why was one concerned about rabbits and cages, while the other seemed frustrated with woodsplitting? So much. And done well, too.

Shashi said...

Beautifully painted the moment in few words... I liked it. thanks

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Pete Marshall said...

less is more...but i want more...you left me with questions...not a critcism..no this is indeed praise...well done..cheers pete

sand-art said...

Much to ponder here.

Steve said...

Spare & potent.

razzamadazzle said...

I love this wonderful pastoral scene. I agree with the others. There is so much more that I want to know. Excellent poem.

Teresa